我编了一篇文章《天地肥皂泡》,有时间者帮我修改,不甚感激!!! - Page 3 - Translation Tips 翻译点津 - Chinadaily Forum
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我编了一篇文章《天地肥皂泡》,有时间者帮我修改,不甚感激!!! [Copy link] 中文

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Post time 2018-4-20 21:52:59 |Display all floors
Nice poem. I enjoy it.  I might touch up the rest later.

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Post time 2018-4-21 07:01:20 |Display all floors
This post was edited by zhihu1 at 2018-4-21 07:02
robert237 Post time: 2018-4-20 21:41
That reminded me of a song by "The Who". The song, "Love, Reign O'er Me". My favorite song by this g ...

Thank you for your sharing, Robert!

I bet the lryic writer must have created that when s/he had taken a shower.

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Post time 2018-4-21 08:42:51 |Display all floors
8. If only
We could do reading together
How fragrant

If only
We could study together
How nice it would be

Comment:

"fragrant" doesn't make sense in this context.


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Post time 2018-4-21 08:51:03 |Display all floors
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If only
We could strive together
How happy


If only
we could work hard together
how happy it would be

comment:

The OP's version is fine.

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Post time 2018-4-21 08:58:18 |Display all floors
This post was edited by zhihu1 at 2018-4-21 09:03

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Heart-to-heart talking
flied into the heaven


The words came from the bottom of the heart
flying to the heaven



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Post time 2018-4-21 09:05:13 |Display all floors
This post was edited by zhihu1 at 2018-4-21 09:19

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The sky came to the the earth gently
It thought
Two of us in one heart
Would never part

The sky was visiting upon the earth quietly
It had thought
the two in one
would never part


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Post time 2018-4-21 09:18:10 |Display all floors
This post was edited by zhihu1 at 2018-4-21 09:19

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After the earth’s confession
It was divergent widely
Dead silently
Suffocatingly


There's a far cry from
the earth's confession
The dead silence almost
made people breathless





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