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I translate the song "小幸运" into English!

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Two weeks ago, I saw the movie Our Times(我的少女时代), and fell in love with the song 小幸运 immediately. I almost cried when the music started as the hero confessed his love to the heroine. I replayed the song again and again. Finally I decided to translate it into English. This was the first time that I did a song translation, and I found the strategy quite different from what I usually used when dealing with articles. 


Here's my translation.

A Little Fate

我听见雨滴落在青青草地
I hear raindrops beating against leaves
我听见远方下课钟声响起
I hear classroom bells keep ringing 
可是我没有听见你的声音 
But I can't hear your voice
认真 呼唤我姓名 
can't hear you calling my name 
爱上你的时候还不懂感情
I knew nothing about love when we first met 
离别了才觉得刻骨铭心 
But I felt lost till we'd parted
为什么没有发现遇见了你 是生命最好的事情
I never thought our meet was the best thing that ever happened to me
也许当时忙着微笑和哭泣 
I was so caring about sorrow and sweetness
忙着追逐天空中的流星 
always chasing after my own dream
人理所当然的忘记 
that gradually I forgot
是谁风里雨里一直默默守护在原地 
the one who always stood behind me
原来你是我最想留住的幸运 
You are the memory I really really want to keep
原来我们和爱情曾经靠得那么近 
We were so close to love, don't you know, my darling
那为我对抗世界的决定 
You gave up the whole world for me
那陪我淋的雨 
The rain saw everything
一幕幕都是你
Everything you did 
一尘不染的真心 
was so so sweet to me
与你相遇 好幸运 
I felt lucky to meet you
可我已失去为你泪流满面的权利 
But I lose the chance to stay beside you, to love you
但愿在我看不到的天际 
I hope you someday, without me,
你张开了双翼 遇见你的注定
you meet another girl and start a new journey
她会有多幸运
How lucky she will be


青春是段跌跌撞撞的旅行 
We all had moments in our life
拥有着后知后觉的美丽
when its beauty wasn't found at that time
来不及感谢是你给我勇气 
It was you who greatly encouraged me
让我能做回我自己 
to stick to my own dream
也许当时忙着微笑和哭泣 
I was so caring about sorrow and sweetness
忙着追逐天空中的流星 
always chasing after my own dream
人理所当然的忘记 
that gradually I forgot
是谁风里雨里一直默默守护在原地 
the one who always stood behind me
原来你是我最想留住的幸运 
You are the memory I really really want to keep
原来我们和爱情曾经靠得那么近 
We were so close to love, don't you know, my darling
那为我对抗世界的决定 
You gave up the whole world for me
那陪我淋的雨 
The rain saw everything
一幕幕都是你
Everything you did 
一尘不染的真心 
was so so sweet to me
与你相遇 好幸运 
I felt lucky to meet you
可我已失去为你泪流满面的权利 
But I lose the chance to stay beside you, to love you
但愿在我看不到的天际 
I hope you someday, without me,
你张开了双翼 遇见你的注定
you meet another girl and start a new journey 
她会有多幸运
How lucky she will be

When I translated the song, I met with some difficulties.

On the one hand, it is impossible to be completely faithful to the original words, though I actually did so at the very beginning. I translated every word in the lyrics, including those implicit logical relations. But later when I sang with the tune, I could hardly follow the beat. Besides, it is better if the last word of every line could rhyme. So the next thing I have to do is to change the lyrics based on my understanding to the song and the movie. For example, I translated "原来你是我最想留住的幸运" into "you are the memory I really really want to keep". I think the hero, Xu Taiyu is important to the heroine Lin Zhenxin, even if he went abroad without telling her. Lin would like to remember him forever, because, in the movie, she kept the tape and listened to it for many times. That's the reason I want to deal with the sentence in this way.

On the other hand, my version consists of too many consonants. Sometimes when they coincide with high pitches, it sounds really wierd. Besides, some lines are so short that I have to draw every word long, which is another awkwardness. But I can't think of any words that could be filled it.

Looking forward to your comments! 



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