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论坛大师请进(之二)——汉英翻译 [Copy link] 中文

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Post time 2006-9-19 22:47:41 |Display all floors
抓住他
一条长长的巷子。一人在前面跑,一人在后面追。追的人边追边喊:“抓住他!”
正在街上巡逻的警察听到喊声,跑步赶来,迅速将刚刚冲出巷口的那个人一把抓住,不由分说将其按倒在地,随即问追来的人:“怎么回事?他……”
追来的人气喘吁吁地说:“他,他得了大奖不请客。”


各位大虾尽管发表议论,好在本文不长,尽量给出自己的全文翻译。随后我再贴出拙作,我们商讨,究竟怎样处理好!

[ Last edited by english2008 at 2006-9-19 11:32 PM ]

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Post time 2006-9-19 23:22:34 |Display all floors
Stop Him
(先介绍场景)
In a long passage, a man is being pursued  by  another one running after him.

The second man shouted  "STOP HIM!"

A cop on patrol heard and rushed to the site.  Hardly before the first man gets out of  the passage when the cop caught him in agility.

The man was immediately subdued onto the ground.

Meanwhile, the second man  just have reached,

"What happened?" asked the cop.

" HE.. he doesn't want to me with the lottery money he won" gasped the man.




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(先从shout着手)
"STOP HIM!" shouted a man, who was running after a man in front of him in a long passage,
A cop on patrol heard this, and rushed to the site just on time to catch the first man in agility the moment the man escaped the passage.
Before the man could say anything, he was taken to the ground.  Meanwhile, the second man just arrived.
"What happened?" asked the cop.
" HE.. he doesn't want to share with me his money won in lottery " said the man breathlessly.

[ Last edited by hly2006 at 2006-9-19 11:38 PM ]

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Post time 2006-9-19 23:40:20 |Display all floors
Stop him
Well,the story begins in a long long lane.A man was running with another right behind."Stop him!"the following runner shouted.
Police on patrol heard the yell and ran up.They caught him at the right time when the man just came out of the lane and put him down on the ground without any explanation and then the police asked the man who just arrived:"What`s going on?He...?"
"He,he got a grand prize but did not invite me,"breathed hard the latercomer.

[ Last edited by barcelona at 2006-9-19 11:41 PM ]

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Post time 2006-9-20 04:54:20 |Display all floors
  STOP HIM!

A guy was being frantically chased down an alley by another one. The second guy was shouting, "Stop him! Stop him!"

Upon hearing this, a patrolman rushed to the scene. He quickly nabbed the guy just as he was running out of the alley, tackled him to the ground without a word, and then turned to the other guy saying: "What's happened? Did he ..."

"Well he ... he hit the jackpot," the second guy replied, panting like crazy. "But he didn't even buy us a treat!"

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Post time 2006-9-20 09:36:38 |Display all floors

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[ Last edited by english2008 at 2006-9-24 11:17 AM ]

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Post time 2006-9-20 09:46:20 |Display all floors

2 cents

close 给我的感觉是可以伸手抓住的距离内。

另外,我觉得原文的词都很简练,那么译文也应当如此。所以用的词也应该尽量简短。尤其是气喘虚虚时候说的话更要简短。
he hit the jackpot 就很好,和前面he连在一起,在‘呼气’的时候可以顺带说出"he,hit the"),不费力,符合习惯。
:-)

[ Last edited by hly2006 at 2006-9-20 10:00 AM ]

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Post time 2006-9-20 10:01:32 |Display all floors

Reply #5 english2008's post

are you "english2008" a group of people? if not, why do you use 我们 instead of 我?you talk like giving a lecture to others....

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